Re: Improvement/Critique Thread

[Kounoko]

To be honest, I created the Ryona Brotherhood to be creamed by the very pretty girls they dream to defeat " title="Razz" />, which is why their stats are... oh well, for the irony.

Which is why I am thinking more of having them in handicap matches against one girl, and yet still get trashed by that one single girl. Well, that's amusing, right? XD

[anegge]

[quote="Harrier":1p8attp8]@Kounoko
I know that my own Barb Wire team is similar, but it's (at least for me) a difference between being not intelligent and being mentally ill.

I agree. Barbed wire is (are?) my favorite of your characters. It's a similar dynamic to the Love Bunnies.

[Tatyina]

The "smart"/"stupid" duo is pretty tropable in general. I do something similar with Team Cait Sith. That is not to say that that combination is BAD because it's a common way to do a tag team. Honestly I like most of the teams that are done in that style and the teams aren't generally done the same way.

[Guest]

I suppose I could ask for some feedbacks as well~

I'd like to know what I need to improve on my writings and roleplaying in general since I'm relatively new to this stuff. I'd also like to know what people think about my characters. Who's your favorite and less favorite characters? What do you like or dislike from that particular character?

Any criticism and suggestion would be much appreciated.

[Harrier]

kaz, I love your characters and your way to play them, even the ones that you do not use anymore. I honestly have no idea what could be improved, the only minor point of critic would be that I was afraid to look at your posts and see which one of my favorite girls you relegated to the reserve team! " title="zomg" /> But with the steady team, that's already solved^^

I'd say - Aiden - Tsuki - Eri - Mayu - Coco. Haven't seen much of Mio and Wraith yet to really give them a ranking. Mayu and Tsuki dynamic is always a great read, Aiden makes the best read in matches, Eri is well in very department, Mayu the loveable rookie that is not really a rookie anymore and Coco the excitable cute circus girl.

But they are all close together, I only put Coco in last place cause I don't like eye patches.

[KillerV]

[quote="Harrier":3lw0f4x6]@Kounoko
The Brotherhood are indeed scum. It's probably a level of violence that makes them not as attractive as opponents, but KillerV's Killer King is probably the most famous and asked for Tension wrestler and he's scum too.

Even Killer King have bad/evil reputation, a scum too, thats the way I wanted him to have.... and so.... <3 thank you Harrier for mention him " title="Very Happy" />

[Harrier]

[quote="killerV":bz2vrjd0]
Even Killer King have bad/evil reputation, a scum too, thats the way I wanted him to have.... and so.... <3 thank you Harrier for mention him " title="Very Happy" />

I am more a fan of your Monster Madness guy, but numbers don't lie^^

[quote="Harrier":1f4wx41q][quote="killerV":1f4wx41q]
Even Killer King have bad/evil reputation, a scum too, thats the way I wanted him to have.... and so.... <3 thank you Harrier for mention him " title="Very Happy" />

I am more a fan of your Monster Madness guy, but numbers don't lie^^

[Cy_Man]

[quote="kaz":iqgw5jo4]I suppose I could ask for some feedbacks as well~

I'd like to know what I need to improve on my writings and roleplaying in general since I'm relatively new to this stuff. I'd also like to know what people think about my characters. Who's your favorite and less favorite characters? What do you like or dislike from that particular character?

Any criticism and suggestion would be much appreciated.

I suppose I wouldn't really mind asking for feedback on my RPing as well as my characters, well at least the ones I used so far for matches. If that would be alright. Sometimes I think I annoy people with my RPing or something.

[Bluemouse]

Kaz might need a hug to help cope with that brutal criticism from Harrier.

C'mere, son.

/hug

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