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Kawaii Champion
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Jessica Wright


Friction Hentai Champion
Ari Nagawa
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Natasha Loclear

and Eirina Makishima

Entropy Champion
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TENSION


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Reira Kirishima
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???


Tension Tag Team Champions
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Tension 24/7 Champion
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Looking for a feedback partner.

Fri Nov 09, 2018 4:13 am by WrestleMind

Howdy! I'm looking for someone to receive feedback from and give feedback to. In part, this is for improving my writing but more so just to enjoy discussing it with someone like minded.  Very Happy

What I mean when I say "feedback".

  • This section was a bit redundant.
  • The way you described that move was exhilarating!
  • This part of the match was a real curve ball!
  • That character's actions were vile!
  • I would've enjoyed more detail here.



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Shadow-y Avalanche?

Tue Oct 16, 2018 5:39 pm by Vcom7418

A-hoi!

Looking for a match for Avalanche for GASTER!

If interested, please contact me via PM or via Discord (address in my sig! Razz)

We can discuss the storyline, and it can be long term and even go past Avalanche! Whatever you prefer, I'll prolly be up for it Smile

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Looking for a match ot her return

Thu Nov 08, 2018 9:57 pm by Edward_Lightner

Hello!

My little Becky is back and is searching for a new match or training!
In hentai or everithing else!

http://www.afwrpg.com/t8323-becky-welsh#209273

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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread

Post by M.J.Caboose14 on Mon Aug 14, 2017 3:44 am

I'll read it Very Happy Also I tend to use very few commas

So I think you are fine lunchador Razz

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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread

Post by Vcom7418 on Tue Aug 15, 2017 10:33 am

I WANT THE TRUTH!!!

What are my weak points and where can I improve my writing?

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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread

Post by RadiantKarna332 on Tue Aug 22, 2017 4:21 am

So, for those who have RPed with me, what do you guys think about my writing?

I am aware that I have a rather... limited vocabulary, considering that I don't even speak English in real life. But is there anything else you guys can point out about my writing?

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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread

Post by Cy_Man on Tue Aug 22, 2017 6:19 am

You're writing is very good, I can completely understand it. And seriously? You don't speak English for real? You could have had me fooled then since your English writing truly is very great and convincing. Smile

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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread

Post by RadiantKarna332 on Tue Aug 22, 2017 6:35 am

Well, it's because I'm an English teacher, so I'm required to know English. But in real life, I speak zero English outside my class.

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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread

Post by Old_Man_Tai on Sat Aug 26, 2017 7:40 pm

I'm glad to see this thread brought back to life! Kudos to all of you looking to help people out!


Vcom, I can't answer that yet, but you and I are long overdue for that thread I promised you, so we'll get a chance then to go over stuff.

Radiant, you're writing seems pretty damn good to me, and, like Pie-Man, I didn't even realize english wasn't your first language. If there's a flaw in your writing, or a way to improve it, it'll take a smarter man than I to tell you what it is, personally I've been impressed and enjoyed every second of our work together so far.

So, here's a rare moment. Who wants to critique me and my stuff? I promise I'll only curse the first 5 of you with eternal damnation for doing so. XD


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Post by Mystery Dragon on Sat Aug 26, 2017 7:51 pm

I'm well aware of my flaws. I just need someone to tell me them as bluntly as possible anyway.
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread

Post by Old_Man_Tai on Sat Aug 26, 2017 8:10 pm

The only flaw I know of yours is that you keep getting the better of me verbally, AND FOR THAT YOU SHALL....um...probably continue doing it, cause your better at the wordy words.


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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread

Post by LARIATO on Sat Aug 26, 2017 8:24 pm

Just gonna casually throw my hat into this ring and see what happens....

be gentle pls

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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread

Post by M.J.Caboose14 on Sat Aug 26, 2017 9:12 pm

Welp...*Cracks fingers* this is gonna be a long one....

Spoiler cause it's so long:
You suffer from SIPS

Slightly Imperfect Posting Speed...which tbf...I am just as bad at...

(I lied it wasn't a long one)

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