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Post by Bluemouse Tue Jul 02, 2013 10:20 pm

Abused children don't turn into superman. Also, people don't go down from being hit in the head because it hurts. It really doesn't hurt very much. Pain threshold has little to do with your brain shutting off.

Best advice of this thread: get rid of his backstory and come up with something significantly less... my vocabulary fails me. Less emo.

The biggest noob move is to write up a history that makes them a tortured tough guy action hero loner and to use it to justify making the character superman. That's not really the point of being here.

That being said, whatever turns you on go for it, but I think you'll find that for collaborative role playing's sake people won't play with you if you always get to be the awesome one.

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Post by Deus001 Tue Jul 02, 2013 10:32 pm

I understand. Chirst I've got so much egg on my face you could turn up the heat and make an omlet out of it. Edits will have to wait however and I'm still keeping the savior persona. Well I hope my new pal Reaver is enjoyin our match at least.

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Post by TekRobo Tue Jul 02, 2013 10:53 pm

*patpats Deus*

Although I think Blue was just a tiiiiny bit harsh there, you're taking this criticism very well. Better then I would, at least. Props to you for that. ^^
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Post by Alexandra Tue Jul 02, 2013 11:16 pm

[quote="Bluemouse":2883usra]
Best advice of this thread: get rid of his backstory and come up with something significantly less... my vocabulary fails me. Less emo.

Less anime, perhaps?

Also: Listen to 'mouse. She knows what she's talking about.
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Post by Tatyina Tue Jul 02, 2013 11:49 pm

[quote="Deus001":wwwci1gh]I understand. Chirst I've got so much egg on my face you could turn up the heat and make an omlet out of it. Edits will have to wait however and I'm still keeping the savior persona. Well I hope my new pal Reaver is enjoyin our match at least.

You are the one who posted this thread and it is something a lot of people would not or could not do, so you're already on the right track. That being said, the advice given is given with the hopes that you will improve so that you and the people who you rp with will enjoy the roleplaying experience further and so that you can roleplay with a greater number of individuals.

There are ways to have personae without being too comic book. I've done it in several different ways myself. People are willing to help if you are still willing to ask questions.

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Post by Kounoko Wed Jul 03, 2013 3:09 am

Well as a novice, I think I should try to get feedbacks so I can RP better around here. ^^
Well, I am not going to stop RPing <img src=" title="Razz" />
But I would like to improve on my RP, so I hope everyone will be kind enough to point out my mistakes, so I can improved.
^^Thanks in advance to all~

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Post by Jizzelle Wed Jul 03, 2013 4:53 am

Wasn't there a stickied thread for this?
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Post by Cy_Man Wed Jul 03, 2013 4:53 am

Yes, but that was for Deus001, and this one is for Kounoko.

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Post by Kounoko Wed Jul 03, 2013 4:55 am

Well, that thread was general for all newbies, I am asking specifically my problems. <img src=" title="Razz" />

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Post by Jizzelle Wed Jul 03, 2013 4:59 am

No, no. [url=http://afwrpg.informe.com/forum/discussion-f4/critique-thread-t7605.html?hilit=criticism:i3ae1wzy]You're both wrong.[/url:i3ae1wzy]
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