Re: Critique Thread

by Bluemouse Wed Feb 08, 2012 12:35 am

You can't remove your own posts.

And the critique thread never failed, Lunar, you just failed to be respectful when asking me to critique you and no one else stepped up to do it. I blame this, and all of the world's other problems, solely on you.

by LunarWolf Wed Feb 08, 2012 12:37 am

>_> you can remove your own posts, as long as it's the newest post...

and [size=200:11g2n2m9]BLARGH!

by Dice007 Tue Feb 14, 2012 8:22 am

Time for me to chuck myself under the bus.

1) Other than cutting out the extensively long disappearances, is there anything else I can work on fixing for my RP'ing in general? I'm going to chalk up character depth and having characters strive more for a win as probable target areas to work on. Right? Wrong? Otherwise?

2) Non-traditional request: For any/all of my recent attempts at character art (Krystal's 2nd image & any of Kim's images): What's working, and what needs an overhaul? I was leaping out of my comfort zone with Kim's 2nd and 3rd images by trying to figure out a variety of different things with both of them.

by Harrier Thu Feb 23, 2012 5:03 pm

@Dice007
Hm, from what I have read, I consider your work to be at least good(coming from awful, bad, below average, average, above average, good, very good, awesome). Any improvement can only come in more variety of words, but that is such a minor thing that you can barely count it as a point of improvement. Regarding the quality of the post, I think that the use of time(does/waits instead of would be waiting/doing) is on purpose. Ref turns wrestler = good idea, and the general idea of a character always helps me personaly to get a feeling for a character. Ok. not always, Garrett Bishop says hello, but not in your case.

Pictures:
I like the female Jeff Hardy look of Krystal(although that guy is a terrible spot monkey, he has the it factor). As I am probably the worst artist of all people in the www, I would shoot into the blue and say that they are of a very good quality, maybe the eyes are a little bit to large, but that could be a question of taste and style.

by Cirno Sun Feb 26, 2012 4:22 am

I have something, though it's not exactly finished yet.

Today I started to work on my blog and set up my characters and although not all of them are on it, I am wondering how everyone finds it so far.

Here's the link, it's only the first post, the second is just a story that isn't relevant to it.

What I was trying to do is make my blog a little more unique from others, so I made cards out of them, and made a small story with each that resembles their personalities.

Hope you enjoy it.

http://afwrpg.informe.com/forum/members-blogs-f42/cirno-s-cruel-critters-t5663.html#p136028

by Underdog21 Fri Mar 30, 2012 11:08 pm

Hey. I know that people haven't been posting in this thread for...well, a long time...but I thought I would make use of it all the same.

1. For those who have rp'd with me (and some of you who haven't), which of my characters do you like the most? Which do you like the least, and why?

2. What do you think about my writing/RP style? Please answer me honestly, especially if you think there's anything on my part that can be improved.

Thanks!

by Clyton Sun Apr 22, 2012 8:51 pm

Hey all. I would also like some critique. Doesn't have to be detailed, but I would prefer it. However, as long as I get the main points, then it's ok, no matter how short it is. <img src=

" title="Smile" /> I specifically want critique on my:

1. Character Profiles
2. RP Skills

I apologize for my horrid inactivity. But yeah, just look around for my more RECENT posts (in order words, the latest) and analyze my RP Skills based on those posts. Character Profiles on the other hand, all are edited to the best of my abilities, although a couple can possibly change.

Also, I don't know other people's styles in this thread that well, so I can't critique on them. I appreciate if someone critique on people like Underdog, whose critique are long overdue. <img src=

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by LunarWolf Wed Apr 25, 2012 2:19 am

Well Well,

Let's start off with Underdog. UD! We've rped a few times now and with a few different characters, I don't know if I have a character I like the least, but I will say that the characters I like the most of yours are Emily and Makie and I suppose Kyo as well, That's odd actually for it's rare for me to like the male characters that much <img src=

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as for the second question, I like it a lot! and that's probably why I like to Rp with you <img src=

" title="Razz" /> I think it was once that I got a bit confused about a submission hold, but we worked that out. So I don't really have any complaint on that. I do like your rp style a lot and think you should keep going with it! you are rather descriptive and you don't have too much text or too much emotions or stuff, I like the fact that when we have rped we have had long parts of the matches without characters needing to talk and just fight it out and still keep a very good flow and managed to build up things that can work in some sort of story ways.

That's about it for UD ^_^

If I have time I'll get to you Clyton! I need to take a close look at that, But I will say that your profiles are pretty good and your rp skill is rather awesome as well. Maybe I don't need to say anything more. We'll see. You are very descriptive and you are fun to rp with. Also since Clyton was kind the first person that I really rped with I am inclined to call him the god of the new world <img src=

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by Cirno Mon May 14, 2012 3:54 am

Yes, I need to help.

Does this bio feel complete? Or is it still missing something? Is it clear to read? Understand?

http://afwrpg.informe.com/forum/kawaii-league-f27/cerbera-the-ghost-t5533.html

Any points about the layout or profile itsself would really help.

by Kitten Mon May 14, 2012 2:42 pm

[quote="Cirno":1yd6wjmv]Yes, I need to help.

Does this bio feel complete? Or is it still missing something? Is it clear to read? Understand?

http://afwrpg.informe.com/forum/kawaii-league-f27/cerbera-the-ghost-t5533.html

Any points about the layout or profile itsself would really help.

It feels complete. I don't think you are missing anything. It isn't that clear to understand. Somethings are quite vague (like her art of fight and description of moves), not sure if that was your intention.

Otherwise it is pretty good. My only problem with Cerbera, and this is a personal opinion, is that she seems more like a character from Streetfighter (junior version) and not a cute inexperienced Kawaii wrestler.