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Champions & #1 contenders
Looking for a few matches.
Thu Mar 29, 2018 11:14 am by Yori
As the title suggests, I am in the market for a few matches, specificly for...
Luna - Vampire themed wrestler who prefers to play with her food before she sinks her fangs in. Prefers no DQ or hentai stipulation matches. Preferred in a more dominant role, fills a more heelish role.
Reiko - Punk upstart with more experience fighting in the streets than the ring. She takes part in hardcore matches primarily, using weapons far better than she can wrestling techniques. Strictly heel.
Leah - …
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Luna - Vampire themed wrestler who prefers to play with her food before she sinks her fangs in. Prefers no DQ or hentai stipulation matches. Preferred in a more dominant role, fills a more heelish role.
Reiko - Punk upstart with more experience fighting in the streets than the ring. She takes part in hardcore matches primarily, using weapons far better than she can wrestling techniques. Strictly heel.
Leah - …
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A match for Brie.
Thu Apr 12, 2018 5:15 am by BootsForSpooks
A week ago, I made my own character named Brie Schuhart. I thought it would be best to post a notice here. I'd like to have an opening match with her.
I also understand that a lot of characters here have story lines. I'd like to start one for her too. Her opponent can lead to a romance, it can be something that turns into a grudge over time, or it can be something more complicated. Whatever the case, we can discuss. I'm open to a lot of things. We'll make it work.
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I also understand that a lot of characters here have story lines. I'd like to start one for her too. Her opponent can lead to a romance, it can be something that turns into a grudge over time, or it can be something more complicated. Whatever the case, we can discuss. I'm open to a lot of things. We'll make it work.
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Taking on a thread or two
Wed Apr 11, 2018 12:50 am by LtLukas
I don't really have a plan in mind. If you want to throw something out there, be it a storyline, match, or whatever, I am willing to entertain it. Let's talk about it.
Specifically, I have two ladies that I want to have a thread with:
The inimitable Jessica Wright. With her, I am leaning for some more hardcore stuff: no DQ, shit outside the ring, coffin matches. But I am willing to listen to anything that you want to try.
The lovely Eka Guramishvili. She has a new flag-based outfit. So maybe …
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Specifically, I have two ladies that I want to have a thread with:
The inimitable Jessica Wright. With her, I am leaning for some more hardcore stuff: no DQ, shit outside the ring, coffin matches. But I am willing to listen to anything that you want to try.
The lovely Eka Guramishvili. She has a new flag-based outfit. So maybe …
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Improvement/Critique Thread
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread
I like color tags because it's easier on the eyes, and friendly text is nicer to read.
And I really don't agree with any of Kitten's points. Why would you put the dialog at the end, and not where it belongs in the context of the rest of the action? Also, if it's always at the end, it's always far away from the dialog the character was responding to.
And if foreshadowing doesn't work for you, practice makes perfect.
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My big suggestion if you want to at least develop an identifiable flavor for your characters, if not actual depth, is to not try to write nine at one time. Supporting roles are one thing and can be done with just a little color, but larger roles require some depth, and that comes from attention and energy and all that junk that for me gets spread thin pretty quickly with multiple characters.
And I really don't agree with any of Kitten's points. Why would you put the dialog at the end, and not where it belongs in the context of the rest of the action? Also, if it's always at the end, it's always far away from the dialog the character was responding to.
And if foreshadowing doesn't work for you, practice makes perfect.

My big suggestion if you want to at least develop an identifiable flavor for your characters, if not actual depth, is to not try to write nine at one time. Supporting roles are one thing and can be done with just a little color, but larger roles require some depth, and that comes from attention and energy and all that junk that for me gets spread thin pretty quickly with multiple characters.
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread
My big suggestion if you want to at least develop an identifiable flavor for your characters, if not actual depth, is to not try to write nine at one time. Supporting roles are one thing and can be done with just a little color, but larger roles require some depth, and that comes from attention and energy and all that junk that for me gets spread thin pretty quickly with multiple characters.
That's a fair point, I think.
Initially, I made characters to fill certain roles and match-types - like a character for hardcore matches, a guy for more serious matches, a guy for less serious matches, and I didn't plan on using them immediately...but I get antsy, sometimes. >_>
A lot of things didn't go quite as planned - like, for, instance, I didn't anticipate doing as much with Ninjette as I wound up doing, but some people asked to do matches with her, and they're leading to more social things, so now I'm considering giving her more of the focus I'd initially planned for others. And I like that, really - I like a certain level of spontaneity in RPing, I think it's a big part of the fun.
But I do need to get a better handle on what I want to do with whom and how I want to do and what focus I should be giving everyone - I agree with you, there.
Thanks!
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread
Ok then, i am going to throw my hat in and look for some constructive advice. Not hate or burns of any kind.
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread
I think anyone posting here would be more likely to get responses by being more specific, like "how's my grammar" or "does this character sound believable?"
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread
I know it would, but i am looking for critique on anything, from my characters to my writing.
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread
I am looking for feedback about my posts. Are they okay? Are they getting longer? Do they need to be longer to be better etc
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread
Length =/= quality!
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It's not the length, it's how you use it.

It's not the length, it's how you use it.
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread
That's what she said. :V
...I'll just see myself out now.
...I'll just see myself out now.
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread
Also as a character, what does everyone think about Toshiko?
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Ayaka Kurata
Souko Kawamoto
Jacob Blake
Shiyomi Tanikawa
Yvette King
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Re: Improvement/Critique Thread
Hey, folks, just thought I'd throw my hat into the ring for some criticism, here. Jumped at this earlier, but (as was rightly pointed out to me) it was much too early to get a good sense of my RP. Been a bit more active, lately (and will likely be more active for awhile, now, unless anything changes), so now that I've had a chance to get more RP in with more folks, I kind of wanted to ask how I was doing.
In particular, I'd like to know if there are any tics or turns of phrase I'm relying on too much, if my characters are individually interesting (or, conversely, are any of them flat-out boring or annoying?), and how I'm doing with my "selling" of other character's moves (too much? too little?). Any pointers or advice would be greatly appreciated, thanks.
Edit to Add: Also, I'd kind of like to know if posting more often has lead to a decline in my post quality. Kind of been worrying about that.
In particular, I'd like to know if there are any tics or turns of phrase I'm relying on too much, if my characters are individually interesting (or, conversely, are any of them flat-out boring or annoying?), and how I'm doing with my "selling" of other character's moves (too much? too little?). Any pointers or advice would be greatly appreciated, thanks.
Edit to Add: Also, I'd kind of like to know if posting more often has lead to a decline in my post quality. Kind of been worrying about that.
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